She wrote their names on the wet sand,yet again..
Yet again the waves washed it away..
"Somethings in life are never meant to be... its best to let it go."
She turned to see him walk away,each step separating them.
She sighed..as lone tear slipped out. It was time to say goodbye.
P.S- this is my first attempt at 55 ficion ... im ready for brickbats and tomatoes :P :)
32 comments:
good enough for first attempt :) no tomatoes from my side!! Pat on the back :)
No tomatoes available these days...if you get some,pass them on
am ready with a hug...aa chalti kyaaa??? :p
Awesome one,but why is ma sweetie pie thinking this way?? :I
Nikhil
dis is a gud start :) u'll write still better :) :)
wonderful first attempt..
keep writing :-)
oye all the tomatoes and eggs u get..give em to me ok..i m planning on making noodles aaj..:P...
achaa tha re..tu badi modest hain!!
luv
amith
a good first shot at it!
55 fiction is one strange sa format... a little too challenging I find it personally....
a nice first attempt, pat on the back (and a kick on the ass, lol, kidding:)
enjoy..all the best!
Cheers!
not good enough !! its really great !!
ps: i love 55 fictions all time :D
good try babe!!swo no tomatoes for u. :P
For the first time doing this, you did an awesome Job!!
Hugs Sis!!
Ne
good start indeed!
Nice work dear....good first attempt...!!!
hope its truly fiction..!!!
I like ur fiction but i hate such goodbyes :(
I hate Goodbyes but it was a good writeup Raka!
Keshi.
First time commenting n u talkin abt tomatoes lol ! i loved ur 55-fiction.Lets start r friendship wit a hug girl..
Tomato nahi hai, chocolate cake khaaogi? :D
WEll done!!!
This is very well written sweetie!!! Why do want tomatoes!!
I guess it also expalins your state of mins a little...nah?
Nice one! Beautiful imagery in that post...
Cheers :)
nice one dear..
touhing..but sad..goodbyes always r :(
ahhh bilkul bindaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaas!
Nice write up..! I love 55 fictions..
Will come back fr other posts..!
Oooooh, someone is getting more creative as days go by :)
Nicely done, Raka!!
ummm u ready for some hugs n kisses??
that was beautiful raka :)
"to let it go..." Easier said than done. As the French say - "C'est la vie." Beautiful attempt. Keep at it.
And yes, I am back. For now! :)
How have you been?
Peace.
Loved your attempt....no tomatoes from my side:)
a gr8 attempt dear...
letting go is not so easy...
goodbye's however painful are sometimes inevitable!! :(
beautifully written
Wah Wah!!! I like it!
I took it as one of those imaginative post filled with bitter reality rather than your first take at fiction55.
Later your PS message made me realized, that it ended.. :-(
Very good attempt..
Cheers
Raka,
i had missed reading few post in your blog..
I left a comment at each...check tha last four posts for the same..
Cheers
Short&Sweet...good first attempt ;)
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